Ideas and Development
 The writer is the main character of a story told by the
essay.
 The story is not just about the writer, but also about
social relationships.
 The problem is not just a personal problem of the
writer, but a problem that others share.
 The essay gestures towards social changes that can
solve the problem or make the problem less severe.
Organization
 Appropriate paragraph breaks
 Flow: transitions, topic sentences, paragraphs stay on
topic
 Introduction that leads directly to the body of the
essay and orients the reader
 Conclusion that gives a sense of completeness and
also a sense of direction
Language Use
 Do not workshop for grammar and mechanics.
 If you want, you can give some help with usage. In
general, you want to use words in a way that would
be accepted by native speakers of US English.